Score: 4

"Graphically reasonable but lacking humour"

submission: Alfred's StoryofChristmas

date: December 30, 2009

Lets start with your animation: It's quite good, the expressions are done well, the drawn backgrounds are nice however your incorporation of various animated elements is crude, and it shows tha way - I'm not sure if that's a purposeful element of style, but for me it doesn't work. The contrast between well animated characters and some of the more crude animations just created an unfinished feel for me.

In terms of your humour, it wasn't really funny. The underlying comic factor was immature and didn't have enough scope to last a film of your length - and although there was potential for a funny parody the jokes made were highly typical and derivative. Ironic considering the genre is 'Comedy - Original' - a distinct lack of originality is seen.

Your animation has potential - polish up on your graphical weak points and discrepancies, then focus on building up your humour. If you just don't hit the spot I would prompt you to be an animator and let others focus on the script.

Score: 10

"YAY"

submission: This Game is a Joke 3

date: March 21, 2009

Brilliant, I lol'd and thought it was great.

Score: 10

"Epic!"

submission: This Game is a Joke 2

date: January 8, 2009

Loved the first, loved the second even more - make more! Just lolingly brilliant.

Score: 9

"The Shadows of Loneliness"

submission: The Shadows of Loneliness

date: March 18, 2009

Well.. where to start, I honestly don't know what to write regarding this, nor did I know how to summarise it (as can be seen). I thought, it was, well, excellent. It was distinctly sad, mostly fitted with what you were aiming for (although I felt that the chaos did not come across in the first part, nor any strength due to fear in the second, the key feelings were portrayed though. It's a great sad tune, however there were two problems I had with it.
The first are how distinctly you change section, I realise each section is aiming for something different but a less direct approach to the change of scene might have benefited the piece, I have not seen the flash it was made for as a result I cannot be sure of my judgement on this point.
The other point, is that although your music is depressing, it is not oppressive, to fully create the atmosphere that you were aiming at the listener must feel oppressed, claustrophobic, however it lacked any feeling of oppression. If this idea of chaos was utilised to a larger degree I think this might have been possible, but without it, it just felt as if something was missing. Your tune is beautiful, and sad, haunting to a degree, however beauty is not necessarily what you should be aiming for, if you had sacrificed beauty for atmosphere the piece would have been different, but (in my opinion) better.

Now don't get me wrong, after all that criticism I'm sure you are wondering why I gave you 9/10, your piece, as a piece is brilliant, if you disregard what it is aimed at, it is a sad slightly haunting piece, I gave you 9 (instead of 10) as I feel there was some missed potential. Either way it is still a great piece which I thoroughly enjoyed!

Good work, sir, I hope to see (hear more so) more of it in the near future!

Score: 10

"A perfect name for an excelling peace"

submission: A Breeze Of Reminiscence

date: January 7, 2009

The spelling error was intended :)

Your piercing music visits memories both tragic and spectacular, the laughs and tears, however cliché this review is, it's actually true. You see a lot of music attempting this, however few succeed.

I can imagine an old man, standing at the end of the lake as the sun rises, the wind singing, the trees are its orchestra. He closes his eyes, indulging himself in the fragile environment, revisiting the child hood, first the tragedy, what everyone always remembers, the hate. Yet with the wind it transforms into joyous tones, a tranquil smile in a distant world.

However, I must break this calm tone, and critique your piece as well as praise. The first problem, was the simplicity, subtle undertones could have added a great deal.. or could it? I'm still torn up about this, is it the simplicity that creates such piercing tranquillity?

One problem I do have, however, is the ending, a conclusive note is needed with such a piece, it's beauty can only be complete with an end, a fading finish does not add to the final product. He must return to this world! The sun must rise and the wind stop singing.

Score: 10

"Bravo, sir, Bravo!"

submission: Caricias De Angeles

date: June 2, 2008

A wonderful piece of music.. it has been a while since I have heard anything but the monotony of noise that is considered music in today's society, I truly loved this, I close my eyes and I see it all, the start really being the end, that note; ominous from the beginning, but it changes oh so suddenly! A girl running on the air, with every step a lilac note appears and paves her way, she wears a smile so beautiful, so carelessly. But there is one more, and boy, sad as he walks, his notes are deep and dark, black in colour, they see each other and his colour changes for now he is walking on a darker lilac, and so is she, and then in a twist of notes he spins her around in the passion of dance, and there are no notes, they are walking on air, pure joy surrounding them, the passion continues and dives deep as you hear the ominous note once again and again, reminding you of the impending danger! And then it falls into contentment, all is well, no more is the sudden passion, just an everlasting joy, but it darkens and once again the notes are darker in shade. She wakes, and knows something is wrong, starts walking, faster, faster! The passion once again but now ominous, dangerous! She runs and weeps knowing that he is dead, the notes twirl in darkness, she stumbles, she falls, she is lost, and for a moment there is bliss, and in the fury to keep it she takes her own life.

That is what I saw when I listened to your music, you have a talent that is very rare and should be cherished! Artists are a rare breed, few true and so many imitators, but you, sir, are one, and I wish, sir, I was one too, for then I may pay tribute to a piece such as this in a way worthy to its feel.